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MLP - Festival by DShou

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A very beautiful piece, invoking a lot of thought and emotion. I found myself sighing at the overall peaceful tone. What especially stands out in the picture are Angel (what a cute touch, adding her!) Fluttershy's silky clothing, and the soft, almost pink moon. However, I do see trouble with the moon's and the lighthouse's light's reflection in the water. The ocean's a very bright white. Fluttershy takes up a lot of the screen, but I can see why she'd be posing that way and Rainbow Dash would be lying down like her casual, carefree self.
Beautiful, but there is room for improvement.
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DShou Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Thank you very much for the critique! Uhm but before putting my vote for fair or not, I feel just a quick reply to confirm a few things is needed if that's okay.

Yea I do see what you mean by the water, it's an error on my part as I've intended to give it a foggy appearance with an inner-innate glow coming from within the water, the location is placed in a more mystical-type land but in the end I wasn't able to portray this from just looking at it. So yea, I agree with that.

I'm not sure about the mention of Fluttershy's size, in relation to the drawing, however. Perspective-wise allows her to be up close to the camera, even then I didn't make her too large to clip out of the view, nor too small because I wanted to keep the characters in focus, Fluttershy especially being a key part to the composition.

I guess the main point I'm curious about is if you can elaborate on the 'room for improvement', because using that phrase leaves a lot of questions. If that's all you meant, the two things above, then alright that's all. Otherwise, please explain a bit more if that's okay.
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Sassycat2 Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Sorry, I spoke wrong :D What I meant when I said she looked bigger is than she took up a lot more space then Rainbow Dash did, she just seemed more important/prominent.

The room for improvement refers mainly to the ocean and little bit to RD's anatomy (which I forgot to mention, sorry again!). I don't really know where her body is when I look at her or how she's sitting.
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DShou Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Ah yea, the amount of space comparing the two is quite different, I guess my logic was that it would look like a shipping drawing otherwise, I wanted to give a Dashie a bit more distance as well.

Back-view + cloaks = confusion apparently, she's meant to be laying on her back, left-front hoof touching left-hind hoof, right-front hoof being lifted slightly in a natural sense to gaze, but because of the cloak I kinda end up leaving the viewers having to assume =S

Alright, thank you again for the critique! Voted fair now thanks to the clarifications.
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